Language Features – Short Narrative

The Hunt

The mouse as fast as a hare; the cat as fast as a cheetah. The chase was on! With the vicious cat gaining ground, the mouse tore around the tree at 100km/h! The big, old, oak tree stared in awe at the two creatures running around the garden. “In order to stop this gruelling grapple, I’ve got to growl grumpily to get this gorgeous gastronomical delight through my gob into my grumbling gut,” said the cat. Scratch! Was the sound of the cat’s claws as they scraped across the concrete path, narrowly missing the mouse’s slippery tail. “Phew! That was close,” said the mouse as he scampered away.

“Look mummy!” said the small child who lived in a nearby house. “There’s a kitty-cat in our garden!” “Didn’t you let your pet mouse Fluffy outside earlier?” asked the child’s mother. “FLUFFY!!!” yelled the small child after she had realised what had happened.

After the small child had finally found Fluffy, who had been hiding  outside, she gave him a big hug, told him that she will never let him go ever again and that she loves him with all her might.

“I love you too,” replied her beloved pet.

2 Comments
  1. Hi Georgie,
    I enjoyed reading your creative use of simile, personification, alliteration, hyperbole and onomatopoeia. Your use of alliteration is really effective and helps to develop the character of the cat.
    Mrs D

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